Just a Little Poem i wrote one night... but i need a title? and you can tell me what you think...?

even if the poem means nothing to you it tells a story in my life...



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Dreamed 'till i couldn't sleep know more,

wished until the genie got sore...



Cryed up untill my tears ran dry.

To make me happy I belivied a lie.



Tryed to belivie what i couldn't see;

Liked the idea of you and me...



But now we have both grown,

and stil i stand here all alone...



since back then i've leared alot,

somethings i can remember others i forgot



I will always remeber, its a guarantee,

i think in time you will aggree...



To tell the person you love how you feel

let them know that its for real



Now going back to you

some how i still wish you knew..



right now we are apart,

but you'll always have aplace in my heart.

Just a Little Poem i wrote one night... but i need a title? and you can tell me what you think...?How about "Forever Yours"? or "An Unrequited Love Affair"? It's a lovely poem and its great to know you're just 14 and yet very poetic and expressive. Just a simple correction, the first line says:"Dreamed 'till i couldn't sleep know more," You should have 'no' instead of 'know'....its just a small error...homophones are tricky sometimes..



Hope this helps

Just a Little Poem i wrote one night... but i need a title? and you can tell me what you think...?
Restless Heart Just a Little Poem i wrote one night... but i need a title? and you can tell me what you think...?For a title how bout something like: In Time...

By the way you meant to say no more,not know more

but other than that I really liked it. Really good at rhyming too.
That was deep for a 14 yr old. I'm 15 and I couldn't write that.

I guess the title could be The Memoir of the Day I Moved AwayJust a Little Poem i wrote one night... but i need a title? and you can tell me what you think...?nice one" lose with in you ",would be great.Hope you like.Just a Little Poem i wrote one night... but i need a title? and you can tell me what you think...?
That is a great poem and if you keep writing poetry i think that you could go along way with it.

For the title maybe:

You %26amp; Me

to be honest i am not sure
Wasted Opportunities. And dear, you should really learn how to spell correctly if you want to write poetryJust a Little Poem i wrote one night... but i need a title? and you can tell me what you think...?
Very Sweet. You obviously have a talent, even at 14.



Two Suggestions...stick this into a Word Document and hit spell check. You have a few spelling errors that Word can fix up within two minutes. Then it would be perfect.



Second Suggestion...go to Triond.com and try publishing it (they have a website where they publish poetry). You may as well get paid for your work. There is another high schooler on there named Jared Stenzel who averages about $250 a month (give or take) for the writing he submits. You could be doing just as well, even at 14. It's free to join that great group of writers, and they pay monthly.



Great job. Keep writing.



Hope this helps.
How about something like "My yearning heart" or "Through my heart" also you may want to run a spell check on it. There are quite a few spelling errors. Good luck with it!
thats a beautiful poem....just a couple of spelling mistekes here n there....:-)....anyways the title could be 'First Love'...coz thats what i infer from this poem!!!:-P
your title could be, you stole my hart, and threw it away, here i am, still looking for it to day
" a part of you holds a great part in me"
"Living with a heart lost of its other part"