How does my love story plot sound?

It's set in modern day England. The main character is Susie, a fifteen year old girl. She sneaks into an over eighteen club with her two friends and meets Henry Larks, a twenty four year old British actor who is well known in England for a TV series he does. Susie is a fan and asks for his signature and he gives her his number since he thinks she's twenty (she looks old for her age). They begin an affair behind his girlfriend's back. Henry then breaks up with his girlfriend when he realizes he loves Susie. One night they sleep together and the next day a photographer takes a picture of them kissing outside his flat. When the story of their relationship comes out Susie's age is revealed and Henry is arrested.

I don't particularly like that ending but it's the most realistic. If anyone has any ideas for inspiration for another ending that would be great. Please give your honest opinion on how it sounds. Thanks! xHow does my love story plot sound?It sounds cute, I do like the idea but it does sound cliche. It does sound like something off Disney Channel except for the sex part. I think you should work on making your story less commercial and more real.How does my love story plot sound?Its Crap......don't mind but really sounds like a cheap Hollywood movie.

And I don't think that a 15 year old girl can look like 20.How does my love story plot sound?Sounds cheesy. And Susie? If your from engand you'll probably be Susan. I've never met a SusieHow does my love story plot sound?
I think there are several problems. First, a 15-year-old girl will not be as experienced, as a 20-year-old would be, not socially, not sexually and not psychologically.



I think it would take a lot of work to whip it into shape, I'm not sure I would try.



Maybe you could have the novel start when he is caught and, instead of the "young Hollywood" type beginning you have, the two could grow and mature as they endure the struggle together? They could both reflect on their relationship's details as the book progresses and how much they mean to each other. I would move her age up, though, maybe to 17.



Hope this helps:-)

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